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Ohhh, now this is a story in the making, isn't it? I loved what you did with that. An incidental sausage and a wow of a look at a life...

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Thanks for reading! I thought it was a fun one.

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well i find your posts and notes so often inspirational and deserving of some acknowledgement Andrei

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That’s super kind! Thanks a lot, man!

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so without punctuation it's like inner monologue like the stream of consciousness which is how my mind is all the time which is why i find i unconsciously revert to story telling via dialogue sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't and i wish i could turn it on and off when i choose but i can't it's my brain doing it isn't it but no my brain is me isn't it i am my brain at least i think thats how it works oh god please tell me I'm not alone in this are you talking to me she says from the kitchen trying to listen to the god awful Archers but at the same time unable to tune out the fact i have vocalised my internal dialogue just like i read out road signs or cluck bark and moo whenever i read the names of animals and she hates it but not more than she loves me which is all that matters.

oh yeah, Andrei ! i liked that story! juicy characters i such a few words. nice!

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Nice attempt! Thanks for checking this one out, Nick!

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Hilarious in parts! The narrator is quite a grumpy person indeed. Cool exercise.

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❤️❤️❤️

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I've found this story quite strange... without puntuation marks, it was a bit difficult for me to understand it. But, well it was a good exercise 😉

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Well, thanks for reading! This style is pretty hard to read, and I don’t often enjoy it either, but it was a useful exercise.

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I loved this, it has so much charge to it! Reminds me of some of Eleanor Anstruther's writing, I think you might enjoy her

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I’m so glad you enjoyed it, Chloe! I know Eleanor, but have never read her writing. I’ll check her out!

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There's a real power to this kind of writing. I'm a fan of long long sentences when they serve a purpose. This was strong, Andrei! Great job.

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Appreciate it! When I first started writing seriously, I’d play with sentence structure and punctuation a lot. This was one of my more successful experiments. These days, I’m more concerned with content than form, but I’m planning to do some more experiments in this vein at some point.

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I was just telling my husband about an exercise we did in one of my college acting classes, where we'd take a scene we were working on and handwrite all the dialogue out, omitting punctuation and stage directions. Then we worked on the scene with our partners without any "help" from the original text as to the dynamics or pacing. We had to feel that part out for ourselves. It was really cool.

Thanks for sharing this, Andrei! It was very dark, but I dug that.

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That seems like a really cool exercise! Thanks for reading, Meg. My fiction tends to be much darker than my nonfiction, for whatever reason 😂

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Mine too! You've read Pretzel. 🙄😼

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Yep, I have! Still, it’s something to ponder.

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It’s astounding what emerges when we write unbounded

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Right? Have to do it more often for sure.

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